Read the first page of my book

I know advertising my own shit is kinda poor but I kinda REALLY need opinions on this.

http://thisblogisyellow.blogspot.com/2011/08/first-page-of-my-book.html

I'll level up anyone who answers the following:

1. Do you want to read more of this ?
2. Did you like the short part you read ?
3. Do you think i should write a funnier less serious book after that one or keep writing the serious stuff ?

Certainly good material for a poem but as for a story, I'm not so sure. The realistic, grim sort of story like this is hard to pull off, as it requires good pacing and character development. I'm no writer so i dont want to sound like some some ponse with my "character development and pacing" stuff, but I've read a lot of stories fall into a loop with this sort of gritty concept. Can you maybe post more pages when you can so we can see some other elements?

Will do tommorow